Anyway, here's a little poem I wrote a while ago; I've done the roughest editing (translation: I cut out about half of it already) and I'm still not satisfied with it, but heck, I could use a few more eyes on it. It's rather disjointed, I know, but that is a bit intentional. I know it needs smoothing. I'll find time for it, because I think this little guy has some potential.
If anyone can tell me where I got the inspiration for it *hint hint- the first and second-to-last lines* I will do something for you. You can make a suggestion, and if you live nearby or I see you often, that something could be food.
Here you go!
Goodbye!
I saw the sun set this morning;
It painted the sky orange and red
In its pajamas, making its bed.
I saw a man walk across a rolling blue
valley,
While another man sailed across a sea
of green.
I kept flying to see what I'd find,
Alas! I should have left expectation
behind.
I saw a man leap with glee when he
found some dung,
Crying, “Look at this, friends! Have
you ever seen such beauty?”
Another ran past a building of books,
A few hours later came the same way,
A match in one hand and gas in the
other.
“I am right! You're wrong!” He
crowed, and set it a-burn.
I saw a coward hiding in the shadow,
A brave man standing over him, sword in
hand,
And when his hero died, and the danger
was gone,
The Coward stood and said “Now who's
won?”
I saw a woman kill her child,
I saw a husband eat his wife.
I saw too many awful things
And now I wish to say
Hello!
But not to man.